Final of all final drafts

O ya!!! I wanna show u all my story! (:

Mike, S10048903D, T1DA

THE UNFORGOTTEN

Christine’s brother wakes up and walks sleepily towards the bathroom, getting the towel on the way. Christine grabs her little pouch on her dressing table and walks hastily to the kitchen. In the kitchen, she finds her mother cutting some vegetables for lunch.

“Ma, today is korkor’s birthday. Remember to buy a birthday cake for him ok”, says Christine to her mom.

“I am going to bring korkor out to celebrate his birthday.”

Her mom stops cutting her vegetables and slowly turns around, looks Christine in her eyes and yells at her.

“Why do you have to go out with your brother all the time??”

“It is his birthday! Why can’t I bring him out to have some fun for a while?” answered Christine.

“Can’t you leave him alone and let him celebrate his birthday himself?” replied her mom.

While Christine and her mom are quarelling in the kitchen, Christine’s brother hid himself behind the wall of his room.

All of a sudden, Christine storms towards the living room, grabs her brother’s arm and leaves the house.

Happily, Christine holds her brother’s hand and skips towards the door of the house. After Christine closes the door, her mom drops the knife, takes a seat and rests her head on the dining table. She starts to cry.

Christine and her brother skip around the void deck. They play all sorts of things, like catching, hop scotch and so on. They end up in the playground. There, Christine decides to give her little present to her brother. She opens her little pouch and takes out a pair of keychains.

“Korkor, this one is for you. One for you and one for me. This way, we will never get seperated”.

“Happy Birthday!”

Her brother smiles. He then goes on to play the swing. Christine decides to push the swing so that her brother will go higher. Christine looks at her brother and smiles. Her brother smiles back.

Christine looks at her digital watch on her left wrist. She decides that it is time to go back home and cut the birthday cake.

“Korkor, come. Let meimei bring you home”.

Her brother stops playing with the swing and holds Christine’s hand. Both of them skip happily home.

Christine reaches her house and opens the door. She shuts the door after her brother comes inside the house. Christine walks to the dining table and is shock that there is no birthday cake for her brother. She then sees her mom offering joss sticks to an altar at the corner of the living room.

“Hi ma, we’re back. By the way, I’m sorry for the argument this morning. I just want korkor to be happy on his birthday.”

“Eh, where is the birthday cake ma?”

Soon after Christine said that, her mother starts to cry. She gets down on her knees and hugs Christine tightly. Christine is confused.

“Go get a shower dear,” says her mom.

“Everything will be fine tomorrow”.

Her mom then takes another look at the altar. The joss sticks that she offers to just now is his son and Christine’s elder brother, Jason.

Last lesson

This was the last lesson for storytelling. Well, nothing much happened… When I arrived in the classroom at 10am, first thing i did was “Animation presentation do already anot??”

Later, I settled down and stuff and when it was my turn to have consultation with Mr Leslie, I got a little worried. I was worried that I might have to redo or remake my story. Fortunately, he said that it is like a final draft, but it CAN be better. He then commented on how this cannot be here and why I should not do that. Many many important points to take note. (No wonder Mr Leslie is a storyteller ^^)

After the ‘serious’ consultation, we watched a film by some french director, I think. It is ‘Leon’. A freaking awesome hitman whos life got changed when he decided to save an 18 year old girl from getting killed by some people. Watch it people!! I think its ranked 84th or something like that.

All the best for my storytelling final or all the final drafts. I want to do well! Oh, what in the world am I saying??? I NEED TO DO WELL!!

My art skills is bad, super bad. Confirm my storyboarding will fail. Like I said, I hate art. It is in my blood. (:

Lesson 7

In this week’s lesson, we were given back our test papers. Please don’t ask me how much I have for the test. Mr Leslie then gave the class back their first draft of their final story. I was happy as my story doesn’t need much ammendments. Later, we watched a show called eating air. It’s a show on the life of teenagers around the 90s. It is a very nice show, but Mr Leslie says that somehow alot of people hated this movie. Sigh…

So next week, although there will be no class, Mr Leslie is going to show us another movie. It is not compulsory for us to come, but I think I will come. I like to show all this kind of movies. I like to watch movies produced by the fsv students.

Week 6

Had to do a storytelling test first thing on a Tuesday morning. I feel that the test is very very easy to score IF I had studied. And, as usual, I don’t study for tests. I don’t know, but this has always been the bad habit for me.

We had our first draft completed and we had to print 5 copies of them. The copies were then given to our classmates for them to comment on them. Hopefully, my story will have alot of negative comments as I like negative comments. Negative comments tend to make me revise my work and, in this case, rewrite the whole story. Oh well…

The class then watched 3 feet apart. Its an animation, on why this couple cannot be nearer than 3 feet as one of them has a speaker and one of them has a telephone on their body and if they come nearer than 3 feet, the one with the speaker will have some very very loud sounds.

Fortunately, we have 1 more lesson of storytelling to go. This means that no more waking up at 7am for class!

Unfortunately, we have 1 more lesson of storytelling to go. This means that the ‘fun-ness’ of Tuesday storytelling lessons by Mr Leslie.

Yeap, so as usual I will be looking forward to the next and final storytelling lesson at 9am. 73-03-21.

Storytelling reflection 5

Today’s lesson is about telling stories using experience.

A storyteller should be concerned with the potential of every experience.

Everything about you – where you were born, what food you eat, the bump on your forehead – your experiences are unique and irreplaceable.

If you dont know what to do with the character, make him yourself for a while.

PLUNDER YOUR OWN PERSONAL BACKGROUND!

We did an exercise on writing 1 true and false story.

So, the purpose of the exercise?
- A true story is not necessarily a good story.
- Good stories have to be worked and re-worked.
- True life stories do not offer neat and relevant endings
- Life is unpredictable
- In a story, we can and must control the events and sequences so that it gives the appearance of being like life.

SUMMARY: Storytelling tools
1) Observation
2) Memory
3) Experience

And for the film we watched, we watched “Autograph Book” by Wee Li Lin. It’s about 2 good friends who fall out with each other for a while because of some autograph book.
Well, friendships are built for 1 month, but it can be broken in a minute.

Lesson 5: The exercise…

Write 1 true and 1 false story.

1)‘Beep beep’. My phone just got a message. I ignored it for a moment and got ready my laptop for my storytelling lesson. After packing my laptop, I search for a pencil in my house for animation lesson. I searched everywhere, in the cupboard, the drawer and my secondary school pencil case. There is not even a pencil in the house! I gave up. I decided that I will go to NP and buy a pencil. Suddenly, I remembered that my phone has got a message for me. I took my phone and opened the message.

‘Pls pass this message to the rest. Today’s session cancelled. I am not feeling well. – Mr. Norman’

2)My dad just bought me a ps3, xbox 360, psp and all the other nonsensical game consoles you can think of. I decided to skip school for 1 week and camp myself in my room to play.

Goodbye, and see you in a week’s time.

Week 4 storytelling lesson

I guess everyone is writing this in their blogs now, and I won’t hesitate to write it too. “Show, not tell”. Bascially, it reminds storytellers or writers not to write what the reader can see. Do not treat the readers as if they are dumb.

I guess I can’t write about what happened on week 4 lesson as Mr Leslie didn’t put the slides on MEL.

But, i remembered something. I was called out by Mr Leslie to act in some scene… I had to act as if I was going to leave the table with Gui Li. So, without hesitation, I whacked or ‘banged’ the table, stand up and leave the classroom. When I looked at everyone else, they were…. laughing!? COMMON! This is acting!! Must act angry all!

At the end of the lesson, we watched 2 short films. Secret Heaven by some Mass Comm student and Sunat by some person.

I feel that secret heaven reflects on Singaporean kids nowadays who are being forced in something that they do not want to do. Eg: Every Singaporean kid have to go through primary and secondary education whether they like it or not…

Sunat, I can say, is quite oldschool. I’ve seen many malay kids long ago who had to ‘sunat’ or circumcise as it is a must in Islam.

I guess that’s all. Anyway, anyone wanna join shooting? Its damn fun I tell you… $2 and you can shoot for 3 hrs. Worth it or not!!? Unlimited pallets and target cards too! (: